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3.1 Mission Goal

The goal of this project is to verify the U.S Standard Atmospheric Model for altitudes up to 100,000 ft through the collection of temperature, pressure, and visual appearance using an instrument carried by a sounding balloon launched from Palestine, Texas.

3.2 Objectives

The objective of this project is to fly a payload at 100,000 ft to photograph, measure, record, and retrieve temperature and pressure in order to compare and verify with data to that obtained by the National Weather Service (NWS) site at Fort Worth.

3.2.1 Science Objectives
In accordance with the mission goal, the science objectives include:

• Determine the variability in temperature of the troposphere, tropopause, and stratosphere during the last week in July from 2005-2008
• Determine the variability in pressure of the troposphere, tropopause, and stratosphere during the last week in July from 2005-2008
• Compare data collected from the sounding balloon to the U.S Standard Atmospheric Model taking into account with temperature, and variability in Palestine, TX, during the last week in July.
• Determine if there are any distinct land masses beneath the sounding balloon, which will affect albedo.

3.2.2 Technical Objectives
In accordance with the mission goal, the technical objectives include:

• Measuring data from a temperature sensor.
• Measuring data from a pressure sensor.
• Measuring temperature and pressure up to an altitude of 100,000 ft.
• Including an imaging instrument capable of taking photographs.
• Develop a payload for a balloon flight.
• Complete PDR, CDR, and FRR.

Is this a better flow of the goal and objectives.... please comment...